Page One The first sketch page. Gio changed panel 9, and I liked it. Gio sent this "With a bit of pride." Obviously he was being modest. On this page, he changed panel 4, so the Governor was pointing to himself; I love the emphasis, and how it underscores his motives throughout. Also, I developed some worry about panel 9, which looked a bit funky, although I decided to trust Gio that it would work. Wow. And obviously, I was a fool for ever questioning panel 9. I asked for a couple of minor polishes on the first two panels, detail on the governor's face, and a darker outline to Dallaire. Gio, ever the perfectionist, gave me a revamped panel 9, as well. Next PAGE ONE;   Panel 1; Captain Dallaire, a military man in his fifties with silvering hair, enters the governor’s study in his mansion. The room is as dark as the sky, lit only by the stars. The governor gestures to one of his chairs, despite the fact that he himself is too excited to sit.   Dallaire:  Sir.   Governor:  Sit down, Captain Dallaire.   Panel 2; Dallaire waves away the suggestion, and the governor relents.   Dallaire:  I’d prefer to stand.   Governor:  Of course. Given the hour, you probably gather it’s something of import.   Panel 3; Dallaire counts off the time’s he’s been to the governor’s mansion, and holds up three fingers on his right hand, pointing at it with his left pointer finger. His four word balloons are joined together.   Dallaire:  I’ve been to the governor’s mansion three times.   Dallaire:  when you asked me to lead the joint Narcotics Unit.   Dallaire:  when the Unit was presented to the press…   Dallaire:  and tonight.   Panel 4; The governor puts his hands on his desk and leans over it towards Dallaire. The first word balloon, “Yes,” is high and to the left, while the second occurs near the center of the panel, giving a pause between them. The third balloon is lower than the second, but can be as close as it needs to be to fit.   Governor:  Yes.   Governor:  I’ve taken a lot of flak, Captain, over the way I run things.   Governor:  But nothing has Bit me harder than sending you after Husayn in Komara.   Panel 5; Dallaire’s expression is stern; he knows his team didn’t perform up to expectation, but he’s still defending them.   Dallaire:  I know that operation was a disappointment. We were given bad intel that Husayn was collaborating with terrorists, and assembling WMDs.   Panel 6; The governor stares out the window, at the horizon.   Governor:  Too many civilians ended up dead, Captain. Governor:  And the only reason none of us were held accountable were the drugs.    Panel 7; Dallaire has circled around behind the Governor’s desk, on the other end of it, not quite looking at the horizon or at the governor. His chest is puffed out, and he’s getting ready for an argument.   Dalliare:  I told you from the beginning I didn’t want Janis on my team. He was involved in that mess under Pierson everyone said was water under the bridge.   Panel 8; Dallaire is riled, and defending himself and his unit. The governor relents without tearing his gaze from the window; his word balloon is small and low, almost orphaned.    Dallaire:  It wasn’t.   Governor:  I know.   Dalliare:  And that wasn’t our fault.   Panel 9; The governor relents again, wearily this time, looking at Dallaire.   Governor:  I know.